Topic:
What led to the great difference between Lin Fen and us
Main Idea 1:
Topic sentence:
We went to Lin Fen First High School for academic exchange and there I saw much difference.
From the class schedule...
Main Idea 2:
Topic sentence:
I did the hosting of the show with some fellow students in Lin Fen and we differ in style.
From this point...
I talked with a reporter about their student council...
Main Idea 3:
Topic sentence:
When we were going on with the cultural exchange, I could see their curiosity if knowing everything.
I would try to be more specific:
回覆刪除Topic: The differences between students in Linfen and us and the causes behind our differences.
I can't tell what the differences are in your topic sentence. You should point them out right in the topic sentence.
You mentioned more differences than two. Can you think of more?
Rewrite and post the new entry BEFORE Nov. 9 (Sunday).